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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

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Today's the era of globalisation different countries sell their products in various countries.
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 international
market
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 has its own merits and demerits which are written and explained in the following paragraphs.
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 of all the globalisation is a very important tool for the world's development. when one country sells its product in another country provincial
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 creates a very good relationship between them. Trade between different territories
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 reduces the tensions on the borders. It
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 helps in the growth of the small countries, because small countries do not have a proper
market
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 for their product produced and global
market
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 helps them to sell their goods in other kingdoms. It helps to understand the taste and
culture
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 of the different countries. On other hand it
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 has various disadvantages like ; when a global company enter into a small
market
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 it affects the retail sellers in the
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.
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 when big malls are open in the city
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 they offer a big discount to the public
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 people buy goods from the malls rather than a small retail shop. It is true globalisation helps to understand the foreign
culture
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 but some time people leave their
culture
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 and opt the foreign
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 which is not good for the country's heritage. These are some points of advantages and disadvantages of the inter-country product selling I personally think that inter-country buying and selling have more advantages compare to the disadvantages. The present time is the time of competition and globalization so without global products development is very hard.
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