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Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #country #environment #two
Industrialization not only boosts the
finance
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finances
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 of a country but is
also
 paving the way for the disturbing environment. Even though some individuals are in a view that a nation can balance the economy and environment , others say that it is not possible without comprising one of them. The current essay
would
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 discuss both
the
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views and end with my opinion. On the one hand, a country can have a successful economy and pure breath if it can take measures
for increasing
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wind purity
due to
 industrialization and vehicle pollution
. .
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Moreover
, tree plantation and avoiding the mix of industrial waste into the natural water sources will help in purifying the air and water. Even though industries are allowed for
the
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wealth generation ,checking the level of air pollution regularly and taking the necessary measures can help a nation control the pollutants. For
an
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instance, in a survey conducted in 2016, New Zealand has proved to be balancing both financial growth and a neat environment.
However
,
on the other hand
, the balance is seen to be slightly impossible for developing
countries
 as their main focus is to generate
economy
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 to stand in the race
of
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 leadership.
As a result
 ,
this
 compromise is leading them to give unhealthy surroundings to the people.
For example
, India is facing the problem of pollution in the cities which have more industries which generate the country's income.
Hence
, developing
countries
 should focus on different ideas to clean the air,
such
 as
decreases
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 the movement of vehicles by encouraging community transportation.
To conclude
, many developed
countries
 have showcased their skills in maintaining a good climate
along with
 economic progress.
Hence
 it is possible. I opine that other
countries
 should
also
 initiate necessary measures and should follow
it
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 so that in
a
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 long run they could deliver a better place of living to the people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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