Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Well,know sportsmen make more capital compared to the other professional sector like

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eacher, general workers. I believe that athletics deserve to earn more because they retire at an early age. I will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraph.

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and foremost reason is that sports person makes a handsome amount of fund during there careers because it is for a short period of time. For an instance, formal UFC champion Raj Patel retire

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week at the age of 35.

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, in starting of the career they have invested many years to get to that level without earning a good number.

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, famous Indian cricketer Hardik Pandiya belong to a poor family, in starting his journey he had faced many financial problems.

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ame for all the sportsmen sometimes they are not able to perform well in some year and because of that many face issue of cash. To illustrate that famous football player of Brazil James. F played well in Brazil FIFA world cup. After that due to some injury,he was never able to return to the football now is facing many financial problems.

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, other professional like a teacher and other worker is able to work until the age of retirement. In starting they earn very less compared to [ersom person but after they got the experience they

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earn a good amount of money.

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, professor of the well-known university, as well as college, earn a good amount of money annually as per the survey of Times of India in 2018. In conclusion, I would like to conclude that sports person earn good money because they have a short time to earn.

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earns in a long period of time.

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financial remuneration
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career span
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