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Supermarkets should only sell food produce from within their country rather than from oversea. What is your opinion on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #oversea
In the modern era, lots of people change
thier
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their
country
 because of
thier
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their
 personal or political reasons but if they do not find
thier
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their
 own cultural
food
 in supermarkets, it will be difficult for them. I am
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explaining
 my opinion in
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future
further
 paras. To begins with, selling overseas
food
 in
m
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the
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arket helps
exploring
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to explore
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 the different kind of
food
 like it helps other nation people to understand
thier
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their
the
 culture and rituals. Different
country
 people meet each other and share
thier
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their
 views on
food
.
Secondly
, some
indivdual
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individual
individuals
 always wanted to try
n
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ew
food
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for instance
,
canadian
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Canadian
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 people
loves
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love
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indian
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Indian
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food
 like chicken curries or biryani because they know vast
varities
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varieties
verities
 of
indian
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Indian
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food
. The selling international
food
in
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in-country
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c
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the
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ountry is not only
benefical
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beneficial
 for people but its good for
b
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a
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usiness like grocery stores or supermarket.
Furturemore
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Furthermore
, media or internet is the main part to motivate people
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,
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for example
, lots of
youtuber
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YouTuber
Youtuber
 always posting
thier
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their
the
 different
varities
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varieties
 of
food
 and they give
thier
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their
 reviews on it which helps
soceity
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society
 to know about to another
country
 and
thier
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their
the
food
.
Moreover
, selling
another
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other
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 countries
food
 assist in relationship
bitween
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between
 one nation to another because both
country
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countries
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 helps each other not only in business but
perservaing
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preserving
persevering
thier
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their
 ancestral
food
. In the end, market sell
food
produce
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products
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 from within
thier
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their
country
 is helps to grow
thier
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their
 nation businesses but if another
country
also
contribute
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contributes
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 in
this
 that would a great for both nations relationship.
Submitted by Simranjeet Singh on

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