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The Importance of car and airplanes in modern life give example

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Introduction
Automobiles become a necessity of life . many people believe that the Present time of motor cars and planes help to save time and money . In my perspective
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I have shared my views on flights and four-wheelers on the Upcoming paragraph .
Body paragraph 1
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 , with there are main fold points to endorse the formal view . Cars provide individual privacy and space with Every and field like ambulance ,police ,Army , private sector and many other sectors use four motor wheelers in
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 emergency for their personal tasks and to reach it with safely . Common public use for their domestic use and transport heavy material goods easy and Secure through roadways .
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 , aeroplanes
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 have benefits on daily basis. mostly individuals prefer flight for long-distance travel like going one Nation to others. Bulky loads
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 as ships , trucks ,Vans, millions litre oil , fossil fuels, a large number of food grains , imported fruits and vegetables and many other varieties are easily transported . Army Soldiers and Navy are private jets for researching of their enemies and world war fight because it has high speed to travel and become a great aim from target from the Sky .
Conclusion
To conclude , vehicles and planes make living standard much advanced from the past . It
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 helps to make the development of the nation .

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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