Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, we are fully exposed to advertisements for various types of products in

this

digital era. While some people argue that advertising stops people became assimilated, I would not fully agree with

such

an opinion. On the one hand, advertisements help people to get acknowledge the brand which is not as famous as the market leader but providing more customized services.

This

encourages customers to freely buy what they want according to their interests, which makes it extremely difficult for one particular company to reform and manipulate the fashion trend.

For example

, if you would like to buy a can of soda, you have more alternatives than Coca-cola and Pepsi, which strengthens the sense of personality for the buyers. To sum, advertising plays a unique role in preventing people from buying the same products.

On the other hand

this

is a potential effect of advertising on people to buy the same things in some areas, especially electronic devices.

For example

, the iPhone, thanks to the strong publicity of Apple, is no doubt the most people would buy comparing other brands of mobile phones.

Such

companies which maintain the domains within the business is more likely to make people chase for their latest products. What’s more, their customers could

also

become an essential part of their advertising machine, turning more people buying the same things. It can be seen that people are losing their opportunities being different people due to the advertisements. In conclusion, I do believe advertising has some power to discourage people maintain their personalities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Developing countries require help offered by international organization to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aids is important. Other believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these views and give youw own opinion.

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