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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits ? Do you agree or disagree ?

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Technical advancements have revolutionized the entire world we live in. It is argued by many that these inventions have brought infinitesimal advantages when compared with the harm it causes ;
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 ideology due to the benefits it has brought in terms of convenience and medical advancements. Convenience is considered to be the most obvious advantage of automation. Because of the invention of numerous device- home and kitchen appliances- the level of physical work has reduced which leads to more comfort while performing any kind of household chore and
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 saves an inordinate amount of time, that can be spent with family or friends. A survey, by BBC News, revealed that automation has really ameliorated the way of working and living with the introduction of various tools.
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, advancements in the medical field have
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 proved as a boon for human life. By introducing various medical pieces of equipment and machines, practitioners have found the ways to cure numerous fatal ailments that seemed impossible in the past ;
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ortality rate rapidly declined since
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 two decades.
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, Cancer - a fatal disease- has become curable with the recent innovations made in
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, if there were no
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 advancements,
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 most of the ailments would have become incurable. In conclusion, owing to a convenient lifestyle and medical breakthroughs, I am convinced that modern innovations have had brought a myriad of benefits along with infinitesimal negative effects.
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