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Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and on society

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As everyone knows, people's lifestyle has changed a lot if we compared
this
 to the past;
moreover
, people tend to spend their most of the
time
 outside their house in modern-day, and
this
 could lead to various effects either on individuals and on people around them.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I would like to compare both points of views on negative and positive sides.
First
 and foremost, the activities of people, for now, have increased a lot if we go back to the past we could see that most of the people only go to work and go back home directly but, nowadays, our society has extended so, it is essential to adapt ourselves into the modern lifestyle.
For example
, people go out and hang out with their friends in order to satisfy our needs.
However
, if they do
this
 often, they are likely to use more money;
on the contrary
, they could spend
time
 more with their friends which could make people feel more relax.
On the other hand
, the family is obviously important more than friends. Going out means that the
time
 that people could spend
time
 with the family will decrease continually, and
this
 could be another reason that could affect people around them.
In addition
, sometimes we need to stay with ourselves to revise the things that we have done in each day, in my opinion, I think
this
 is a significant thing that everyone should do in order to improve themselves, and
this
time
 will completely go if you spend the
time
 with others more than spend the
time
 with yourselves. To sum up, meeting friends or going out is one of the activity that really important to everyone, especially in a modern lifestyle.
However
, you need to allocate the
time
 to the family, and yourselves as well.
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