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Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and on society

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As everyone knows, people's lifestyle has changed a lot if we compared
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 to the past;
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, people tend to spend their most of the
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 outside their house in modern-day, and
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 could lead to various effects either on individuals and on people around them.
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, in
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 essay, I would like to compare both points of views on negative and positive sides.
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 and foremost, the activities of people, for now, have increased a lot if we go back to the past we could see that most of the people only go to work and go back home directly but, nowadays, our society has extended so, it is essential to adapt ourselves into the modern lifestyle.
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, people go out and hang out with their friends in order to satisfy our needs.
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, if they do
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 often, they are likely to use more money;
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, they could spend
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 more with their friends which could make people feel more relax.
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, the family is obviously important more than friends. Going out means that the
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 that people could spend
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 with the family will decrease continually, and
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 could be another reason that could affect people around them.
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, sometimes we need to stay with ourselves to revise the things that we have done in each day, in my opinion, I think
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 is a significant thing that everyone should do in order to improve themselves, and
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 will completely go if you spend the
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 with others more than spend the
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 with yourselves. To sum up, meeting friends or going out is one of the activity that really important to everyone, especially in a modern lifestyle.
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, you need to allocate the
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 to the family, and yourselves as well.

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