More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?
The
number
of people owning their first Use synonyms
car
has increased significantly in developing Use synonyms
countries
. The principal Use synonyms
problems
Use synonyms
this
causes are pollution and Linking Words
traffic
congestion, and the most viable solution is to restrict Use synonyms
car
use in downtown areas.
The primary issue developing Use synonyms
countries
face when their citizens start to buy Use synonyms
cars
is increased pollution. Use synonyms
This
occurs Linking Words
as a result
of growing hazardous exhaust fumes from Linking Words
those
private vehicles which Correct determiner usage
apply
ranks
only behind the carbon Change the verb form
rank
emission
from industrial activities. The greater Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
number
of personal means of transport on the road is Use synonyms
also
responsible for a rise in Linking Words
traffic
jams. Use synonyms
This
is because the road system and infrastructure in low and middle-income Linking Words
countries
have not kept up with the volume of Use synonyms
traffic
, especially in metropolis cities. Narrow streets, lack of parking lots and ineffective Use synonyms
traffic
Use synonyms
system
often result in long-hour Fix the agreement mistake
systems
traffic
jams which make it a nightmare for most commuters. Use synonyms
For example
, during rush hours in Linking Words
Vietnam
it may take from 20 minutes up to 50 minutes to travel a 500-meter distance.
A solution to these Add a comma
Vietnam,
problems
is to ban private Use synonyms
cars
in downtown areas Use synonyms
while
only allowing public transportation. Linking Words
This
would solve the Linking Words
problems
by discouraging current Use synonyms
car
owners from Use synonyms
communting
to work Correct your spelling
commuting
this
way Linking Words
as well as
making other people consider more carefully before purchasing their first Linking Words
car
. Use synonyms
For example
, local authorities in Ho Chi Minh City in Vietnam passed on laws to restrict Linking Words
cars
in the city Use synonyms
center
Change the spelling
centre
last
year and continue to expand the list of places where private Linking Words
cars
are strictly prohibited. Use synonyms
This
has resulted in a larger Linking Words
number
of passengers in other public Use synonyms
transportations
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transportation
such
as buses or trams. The proportion of citizens resorting to other greener vehicles Linking Words
such
as bicycles Linking Words
is
Verb problem
has
also
climbed markedly.
In conclusion, Linking Words
due to
the growing Linking Words
number
of first-time Use synonyms
car
buyers, the major Use synonyms
problems
that developing Use synonyms
countries
are facing are worsening air quality and persistent heavy Use synonyms
traffic
and limiting private Use synonyms
cars
in city areas is thought to be the most viable solution to Use synonyms
this
issue.Linking Words
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