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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sport person or musician. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.

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When it comes to developing
talent
, it is affirmed by some that some children have innate characteristics to be
talent
.
In contrast
, others think
talent
 is acquired during early childhood and it depends on several environmental factors. I am convinced learning at early ages is the kay to promote
talent
 in kids. In the one hand, who sustain the
first
 idea say certain babies have
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atural potential to be good at music or sports, being related to intrinsic factors
such
 our genetic inheritance.
In other words
, if an individual received environmental stimuli, which promote a certain ability or skill, could learn faster as well as could be really good at
this
 ability.
However
, only those babies who have a genetic base will be able to become brilliant in some disciplines.
For example
, there are entire families of artists where family members share similar skills and they could be explained by the "information" in their genes.
On the other hand
, a group of people believed different experiences which a person is exposed since birth, promote the acquisition of
talent
.
For example
, if babies were isolated at an early age, with poor environmental stimuli, they would not develop almost any skill. There are a lot of studies in mammals which have shown similar behaviours regarding lack habilities whit specific stimuli.
However
, human beings are much more complex than inferior mammals. In my opinion, I think it is essential learning where an individual is young. Not only the learn faster, but
also
 they do that far more effectively, developing a certain
talent
. I know about that since in my family there are many miscuan who have learnt from other family members. In conclusion, it is believed by some a
talent
 is an innate characteristic whereas others affirm the role of stimuli is the most important factor.
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