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Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that schools should offer an opportunity for teenagers to gain
work
 experience.
However
, others disagree and think that learning a
school
 material is more important. In my opinion, pupils should spend some time working, but their academic results should not be affected. I think, that time spent working helps any future graduate. During shifts teenagers are taught
work
 based skills,
such
 as: time-management, communication, leadership and organizational skills. They gain practical knowledge that helps them in their future careers and makes teenagers more employable.
Also
, having
work
 experince helps students to choose an appropriate field of
career
.
For example
, my good friend thought about becoming a nurse;
however
, after few shifts in the hospital she realized that
this
career
 is not for her. If she had an opportunity to
work
 in the hospital during her
school
 years, she would not waist 2 years of studying in the university.
On the other hand
, spending time at
work
 makes teens less focused on their academic achievments. Some of them might be fully involved with their
career
 and not focus on studying
school
 subjects.
However
, it is important to remember that academic lessons are fundamental and it is crucial to graduate high
school
.
For instance
, employees who do not have a high
school
 diploma are rarely promoted to a higher position as they are not qualified.
Therefore
, adolescence should focus on achieving outstanding academic results
first
, rather than on their
career
. In conlusion,
work
 experience benefits children in many ways
such
 as developing new skills and helping with a
career
 choice. But, it is more important to focus on
school
 achievments and get a high
school
 diploma.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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