In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

Children' s
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born
in the modern world spend a minor of their
time
with their
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siblings
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as grandparents.
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; location, illness, modern behaviours or family problems.
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, the impact of
this
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several issues in
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family well-being and how children's development. The concept of family is crucial in many cultures across the world. Family brings support, values, beliefs and traditions which are essential for
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uman being. In the past, people were part of big families.
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many people had numerous family members; aunts , cousins, grandparents, and uncles.
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, all of them have many stories about spending
time
together; sharing a meal in Christmas, playing the piano in the afternoons, or many of them remembered the grandparent's stories before
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to bed.
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, all these
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beautiful
habits are part of the past. Nowadays, families are small and technology has impacted
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substantially
people's
life
in order to
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less family
time
and reduce their opportunity to create bonds.
This
produces detrimental effects on all of the part of the family, especially in children because they need special support on the journey of developing their personality. One article of the magazine Parenthood Adelaide claims that children who are not able to create bonds or spend
time
with their
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are less connected with their roots and traditions which can be a problem in the future when they want to create relationships. In
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modern families where parents working all
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day. Grandparents are essential to guide children and care
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them. Elderly people can
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schooling through experiences, wisdom and advice.
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, grandparents are more able to give love without any restrictions because they
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ot have
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strict role in the children's
life
. In conclusion, family
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aramount foundation in any children. Grandparents have a fundamental
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role
in their
life
because they
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the most important values of
life
. The effects of avoiding
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relations can
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several disorders in children behaviours and
also
missed important and necessary
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advice
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of
life
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