In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

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family well-being and how children's development. The concept of family is crucial in many cultures across the world. Family brings support, values, beliefs and traditions which are essential for

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uman being. In the past, people were part of big families.

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many people had numerous family members; aunts , cousins, grandparents, and uncles.

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together; sharing a meal in Christmas, playing the piano in the afternoons, or many of them remembered the grandparent's stories before

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less family

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and reduce their opportunity to create bonds.

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produces detrimental effects on all of the part of the family, especially in children because they need special support on the journey of developing their personality. One article of the magazine Parenthood Adelaide claims that children who are not able to create bonds or spend

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are less connected with their roots and traditions which can be a problem in the future when they want to create relationships. In

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modern families where parents working all

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day. Grandparents are essential to guide children and care

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In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that children should attend extra classes after school while some disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nation in such area. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

Computer and A.I.technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enchance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative or negative development?