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The chart illustrates the proportion of Anthropology graduates from
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university did after completing their course.
Also
, a table compares the income of the anthropologists after 5 years of the job. Overall, most of the students ended up in full-time jobs, while the least percentage of them chose part-time works and higher studies.
Additionally
 , The freelance consultant and government employees had the biggest proportion of the rise in income.
To begin
 with, more than half of the university graduates took full-time work, whereas those who opted for a part-time job and part-time job with study constituted 15 per
cent
 and 5 per
cent
 respectively. While 8 per
cent
 went for higher education, 12 per
cent
 remain jobless.
Furthermore
, 5percent of those who worked as freelance and 5perxent in the government sector received 25000 to 50000 dollars after 5 years and 10 per
cent
 in case of private workers.
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,
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 half of the government workers received 100 thousand dollars in 5 years, which is 40 per
cent
 and 30 per
cent
 for freelance and private anthropologists respectively.
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