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you have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain Why you want to leave your current job - I completed my masters in accountant . got job in that . describe what kind of job you are looking for - I was looking for accountant , who can deal with bank ask for some help or advice : As you are working in bank as accountant

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Dear Annie, I hope you're doing well !
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 just writing to let you know that I have decided to
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quit
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 my
job
 soon because I want to build
career
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a career
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 in my field . As you know , I am working
part-time
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job
 in
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 restaurant in order to pay my daily life expenses and
also
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study
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 on the side . I just finished my
three years
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 master's degree in accounting ,
therefore
 , looking for
job
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a job
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 as
a
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 accountant. Well!
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 looking for
junior
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 accountant
job
 in any
firms
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 for
beginning
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the beginning
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 .When I will gain
few
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 years of experience
then
 I would like to open my office in the future . In order to
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sharpen
 my skills ,
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 need to work in
professional
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a professional
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 environment for some years.
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 looking for your help to find me
job
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a job
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 because you're
former
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 accountant in the HR Company . If you have good connections there ,
then
 it would be easy for me to apply for open positions . I would be really
greatful
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grateful
 to have you
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 friend ,as you always helped me in difficult situations . Look forward to
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 you. Best wishes, Roopkamal.
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Spelling and Accuracy
Review and correct minor spelling errors (e.g., 'quite' should be 'quit', and 'sharpe' should be 'sharpen'). Consistent spelling accuracy enhances clarity.
Detail and Development
Expand on how your friend might help you specifically (e.g., advice on CV, preparing for interviews, specific contacts). This provides depth to your request for help.
Sentence Structure
Work on sentence structure for smoother flow. For example, consider combining related sentences to reduce repetition and enhance cohesion.
Task Response
Your letter effectively communicates your primary intentions and needs, showcasing a clear task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
You structured your letter with a coherent flow, transitioning smoothly between paragraphs and topics.
Tone
Your writing tone is appropriate and friendly, fitting the context of a letter to a friend.
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