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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Although
 the
internet
 is believed to be one of the most popular sources of
information
 nowadays, it still has some drawbacks in comparison with
such
 traditional source as books are.
Nevertheless
, I personally consider that the use of the
internet
 provides more benefits than drawbacks, mainly due to its universal accessibility and
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 for sustainable growth. To start with, being one of the most advanced technologies, the
internet
 enables people worldwide to get an easy and fast access to the
information
 in our
fast changing
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 environment. Hardly any book may be published in
such
 a short period of time, as the same data may be uploaded to the
internet
.
This
 may be really crucial,
for instance
, when it comes to
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scientific studies in medicine, which may change the way doctors treat some dangerous diseases.
Moreover
, by means of using the
internet
 as a mean of storing
information
, people may lower the amount of paper, helping to save the environment and money. As paper production is water and energy-consuming, uploading
information
 to the
internet
instead
 of printing the books may contribute a lot to sustainable development.
On the other hand
, using the
internet
 may still have some drawbacks if arranged unconsciously.
First
 of all, it mainly refers to the young generation, as young people may be easily distracted by the ads and irrelevant
information
 when using digital media. Staring to search some material for their classes on the
internet
, they may just switch to playing
on-line
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 games or chatting with their friends on social media.
In addition
 to indicated above, rarely do people understand that
information
 on the
internet
 may be unreliable or even misleading.
Thus
, it is really vital to evaluate the source rather than following it blindly. To summarize, I consider that changing the way in which
information
 is stored from books to the
internet
 offers numerous advantages, provided that people use it deliberately.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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