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Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions?

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Nowadays, many adults find it is difficult to take good
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 of their parents due to the lack of
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. In
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 essay, the causes of and some methods to solve the shortage of
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 for elder people will be discussed. There are two main reasons related to
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 issue.
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, many people have to move out to work far from their parents.
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, they may settle down and live in other areas, which is
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nconvenience for them to take
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 of their parents. Another reason is the
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 they have to spend for their own family.
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, if an adult has a kid, he needs to take
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 of his child and may not have
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 to look after the elderly. With all reasons mentioned above, it is clear that many elders are not looked after carefully because of their children's limitation of
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. Many people may think of several solutions to overcome
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. The most common way is to send elders to elder houses
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, they will be responsible by professionals.
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, by living with other people of the same ages, they may enjoy the atmosphere and can feel happier. The other way to solve
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 is to hire
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 to look after elder people during day times when family members are out to work. The outcome of
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 method is that the elder can live with their children and grandchildren,
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 they can feel less lonely. To conclude, the reasons for the lack of
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 for elders are the distance from where their children live and
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 to take
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 of their family rather than their parents. There are some solutions for
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 and it may depend on elders to choose which way works for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burnout
  • neglect
  • emotional distress
  • social interaction
  • mental stimulation
  • financial costs
  • community care services
  • respite care
  • telehealth services
  • flexible work arrangements
  • caregiver leave policies
  • support networks
  • emotional support
  • monitoring systems
  • training programs
  • interpersonal strain
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