Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What are the problems associated with this? What solutions can you suggest ?
Everybody pursues a better bonus for there employee who
lifestyle
in their Use synonyms
live
. Obviously, today’s generations work Replace the word
life
are
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is
computer related
and they are attached with the electronic device for most of the times. The new trend has some cons and some suggested solutions. Add a hyphen
computer-related
This
essay will emphasize Linking Words
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the problem of current Verify preposition usage
apply
lifestyle
along with describes some possible solutions.
There are endless negative impacts of Use synonyms
this
desk oriented Linking Words
lifestyle
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, over-weight; due to less Linking Words
walk in
work-place individuals are gaining the weight. Add a hyphen
walk-in
This
body condition leads to several vital Linking Words
disease
in near future. Change to a plural noun
diseases
For example
, a young employee died recently due to heart disease which occurred due to over-weight body condition. Linking Words
Secondly
, eye disorder; by looking at the screen continuous employees are getting eye problem more often. Eye dryness alone with eye pain Linking Words
are
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is
the
common example of Change the article
a
this
. Linking Words
Finally
, the attitude problem, like rough attitude, rude Linking Words
behavior
and less concentration Change the spelling
behaviour
are
Change the verb form
is
the
one of the Remove the article
apply
cause
of Change to a plural noun
causes
this
unhealthy Linking Words
lifestyle
.
Now the solution, there are few recommendations which I can suggest. Mainly Government and organizations Use synonyms
involvement
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involved
are
most important. Change the verb form
is
Government
can introduce a new tax benefit if an individual spent Add an article
The government
w
ell amount of time in Add an article
a
Use synonyms
g
ym. Add an article
the
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rganization can impose a rule to utilize Add an article
an
the
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g
ym regularly. Add an article
the
For example
, recently Linking Words
a news
mentions a well-know organization offers a good amountRemove the article
news
a piece of news
Verify preposition usage
of
utilize
Change the verb form
utilizes
gym
facilities.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
g
ym can promote via offering a gift card or some food coupons for their members which may be helpful. Add an article
the
a
Furthermore
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ublic campaign might Add an article
the
a
also
be helpful in Linking Words
this
situation.
In conclusion, we are living our life dangerously as our health condition becoming worst Linking Words
everyday
. It would be our responsibilities to make our life good and active by any terms. Implementing recommendations or steps may not Replace the word
every day
be fulfill
if we can not make it work in the right way.Change the verb form
be fulfilled
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