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Tourism is ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individual and society?

#tourism #industry #society
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In
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 present world, some people think
tourism
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 is a huge promising
industry
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, which will help any
country
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 to build their own dynasty.
This
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 essay completely agrees with the suggestion that the
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 growing by
tourism
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. In
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 essay,we will look at
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 the reasons why
tourism
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 is growing
industry
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 as well as the benefits in
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.
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, the people after a whole year of work and study they actually need to spend some time with family in a beautiful place so, they will look for a
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 provide them with
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 environment.
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, when a big family looking to travel, they will search for a place safe and provide many options to have fun, the lace can add to
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 a new culture, expand their knowledge about the new region in the world.
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, if the
country
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 looking forward to attracted people , they have to raise the quality of their area.
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, the benefits behind being a
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 visited by
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 in each year, the season of the people visiting will be a gold time as in the result of that the economy will significantly rise to hit the top point.
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, each person who visits the town will buy at least drink and food, which surely will help the local people to get more and more by selling the thing to them. In conclusion, the
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 work to improve the level of life and make a suitable hotel and garden and public services available to
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 will help the economy definitely. It agreed that travel is ever a promising
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. I recommended looking in each area to find the secret will make people visit it one day.
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