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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spots or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #talents #spots #music #child #sports #person #musician
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 the percentages that the government spend of GDP from 2000 to 2025 in
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, health and roads and railways. Overall, the percentage spending of GDP are expected to change slightly in the
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 and roads and railways sectors, whereas in the health sector it is projected to change significantly By 2000, the
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 sectors had the greatest percentage spending of GDP within the three areas.
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 2000 and 2005, and it is expected to keep doing so in the following years. In 2025, the
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 sector is projected to have under 4% of the GDP expenses. In terms of roads and railways, the spending of GDP fluctuated during the period. By 2000,
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 significantly and stayed at 3%.
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 the health sector spending of GDP was at 4% in 2000, it increased in the following years and it will be expected to have the same trend in the future. By 2025,
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 area will be projected as the one with the highest spending of GDP with almost 8%.
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