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Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a “gap year”; before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to a broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #year #“gap #year” #work #university #chance #broaden #horizons #waste #time
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It is believed that a gap
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 is a good opportunity for high
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 graduates to travel.
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, others disagree and think that it is a waste of valuable time. In my opinion, students can consider an option of a
year
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 off only if it is perfectly planned and budgeted. On one hand, there are a lot of advantages to
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 a gaper. High
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 graduates stop depending on their parents and have an opportunity to become more mature and independent.
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, it is a great possibility to see the world, experience new cultures and meet different people.
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, students have time to think about their future career field and make the right choice about their degree.
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, after a gap
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 knowledge gained in high
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 might be forgotten,
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 students can experience difficulties during their studies.
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, students forget basic mathematical formulas as they have not been used in real life;
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, their grades might be affected. Another problem that can occur is the financial aspect. It takes a lot of money to travel and gapers might use all of their savings towards tourism.
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 leads to bankruptcy and inability to get
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 loans. In my opinion,
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ap
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 is a good option only if it is perfectly planned. It requires many financial skills to budget the trips to avoid
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future financial problems.
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, many high
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 graduates regret
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taking a
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 off from
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 as they do not have enough money to return to learning institutions. There are a lot of benefits and drawbacks of taking a time off from
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 and work.
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, any decision should be weighted and all outcomes should be considered.
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