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The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by the humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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In
this
 present world, we all are facing a true threat regarding the significant increase in
population
 number each year, and that become the greatest issues faced by the
population
 and the reasons for
this
 continued gain.
This
 essay completely agrees with the suggestion
that is
 the greatest problem faced by humanity. In
this
 essay, we will look at
first
 in the reason why that problem become a threat as well as my opinion regarding why I agree with
this
 kind of issues needs to be solved.
Firstly
, the causes of the raise
this
 problem constantly each year until becoming a real threat are the absence of the rules from the government.
For instance
, if the government in the past found and apply restricted rules to control the family member having children that would be good and right solution
furthermore
 make a clear limit about an increase in the
population
.
However
, If each family restricted by a certain number of a family member we will not face
this
 struggling any more time.
Secondly
, we live in nature with few sources of water, food and energy, if we constantly raising the number of
population
 that means we facing a danger.
For example
, our sources of living
such
 as water or food or gases will reach to the plateau that means is did not enough for all the
population
 in the world any more, the result will be may the whole earth start to enter in the food and water war as each country will keep their supplements and will be no more import plus export between countries. In conclusion, the increase in the
population
 become world issue, and we have to cooperate with each other to find great solutions allowed to our
next
 generation live in a high-quality life. It is agreed that humanity will face in future many side effect if the
population
 keep constantly raising. I recommended finding strategies help and support to keep humanity safety and healthy.
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