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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #life #luck
Many people believe that
luck
 is the most important element to succeed in their life while others say that it is a wrong thought. I agree with the statement
that is
 fortune is not critical for the success of life. My essay will state the aspect which
support
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 my opinion.
To begin
 with,
luck
 is one of
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mportant factor for the success of life, but that can be the most essential element to achieve their goal.
For example
, according to an article from
l
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ocal newspaper, There was a person who won a lottery and became rich. But he did not manage the huge amount of money.
Consequently
, he got cheated and invested in bad stocks and properties. It ended up being bankrupt of him. Like
this
 case,
although
 people are lucky to succeed, the achievement runs away easily.
On the contrary
, The
effort
 and sweat people make is a major point of achievement in their area. There are famous people,
for instance
, Bill Gates, Waren Buffett who are extremely rich in the world. Definitely, they succeed, but they did not depend on
luck
. They have studied and accumulated knowledge in their areas to succeed.
In other words
, they made an
effort
 to achieve their goal.
In addition
, Olympic athletes are
also
 people who achieve a goal. To join the Olympic game, they have had harish time for long. We can not expect how much
effort
 and how many times they have done. In conclusion, people can be rich and live for a long time by
luck
.
However
, we should ignore these cases to succeed, because those are few cases to happen. People should believe that individuals have to make an
effort
 to be a successful person in the areas they want. Providing that the same number of opportunity are given to all people, please try and repeat the performance which makes you be a successful person
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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