During a recent plane journey, you sat next to businessman who own a chain of restaurants, and he suggested that you should contact him about possible job in one of his stores. write a letter to this businessman

Dear Mr. Smith, Hope you are in the best of spirits. My name is Alicia Liberty. I met you
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week on a plane journey from Dubai to Canada. I am looking for a
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in Mississauga, so I am seeking your help for a
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position available at your restaurant nearest to my city. I came to Canada as a student for higher studies in a Hotel Management program
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and looking for a part-time
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.
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home, I had experience as a cashier at a food store where my
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was to receive orders, make bills, handle payments from customers etcetera. So, I'm looking for similar work here too. During our travel time, you were sitting just next to me, so, we got a chance to conversate with each other.
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, I came to know that you own many restaurants in Canada, and you
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advised me to contact you if I need any assistance regarding a
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. I am thankful to you for giving me your time. With
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letter, I'm attaching my resume as well. Please review my resume and consider my candidacy for a suitable work position at your Mississauga location. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Alicia Liberty.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear idea to help the reader understand better.
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Add more detail about why you want to work at his restaurant.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and polite, which is very good.
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You clearly mention your background and experience, which is helpful.
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