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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Taxation is one of the
government
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’s main sources of revenue.
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 many citizens believe that
tax
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money
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 turns the country into a more advanced and powerful one, others affirm
they
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that they
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 can
fulfill
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fulfil
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 different tasks
instead
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 of
this
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 legal duty.
It is clear that
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 paying
taxes
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 is considered
as
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apply
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a civic duty,
although
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 doing so is a requirement of the law. When
people
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 buy things at the store, they usually pay sales
tax
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. In the first place, the
money
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 everybody pays in
taxes
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fund
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funds
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 their
government
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.
Therefore
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, the more cash the state gets, the stronger the nation is. Specifically, the authorities use
this
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money
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 to keep the
government
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 running, build and maintain the necessary infrastructure. They
also
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 pay salaries of the
government
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 workers, the retired ones, the public
sectors
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sector
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 and help to support common resources,
such
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 as police and firefighters. What’s more, millions of inhabitants benefit greatly from the
money
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 they have to pay.
Tax
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 helps to ensure the
road
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roads
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people
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 travel on are safe and well-maintained,
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and improve
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improve
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improves
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 healthcare and education.
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, over the past few years, the quality of service has improved by leaps and bounds, and it has only happened thanks to the taxpayers.
In other words
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,
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tax
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taxes
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 provide
people
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 with a number of advantages every hour of the day, every day of the year round. Some
people
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,
however
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, argue that they strengthen the country through a diversity of activities for communities. Those
take
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who take
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 part in charity clubs or
organizations
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organisations
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. They go to places and give both material and mental support to the needy.
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, a renowned singer Thuy Tien called for
hundred
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hundreds
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 of
billion
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billions
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VND
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of VND
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 from the donors and now, she and her husband are in Quang Ngai, a province situated in the Middle of
Viet
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Vietnam
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 Nam in order to offer aid to
casualties
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the victims
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 of the flooded areas.
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, a few managers with financial potential run their own
business
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businesses
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 to create employment for the local workers. Or simply, they invest
money
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on
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in
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 building accommodation and kindergartens for the poor workers from the industrial zones. It is said that all the above
people
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 more or less set good examples for the whole community. In conclusion,
taxes
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 provide a counter-balance by softening extreme disparities in wealth, power and benefit. In my opinion,
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government
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the government
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 is the only institution to carry out the schemes in all social aspects perfectly and systematically.
As a result
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, paying
taxes
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 is the act of love and
civilization
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civilisation
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 nowadays.

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task achievement
Your essay generally addresses the prompt well, but try to make your opinion clearer in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are long and complex. Break them down into shorter sentences for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help your reader follow your thoughts better.
task achievement
You provided good examples to support your arguments, especially about the benefits of paying taxes.
coherence and cohesion
Your points are well explained in the body paragraphs, showing good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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