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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people say that it is too late to do something while others think that actions can be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both sides of the view and give your opinion.

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Activities and technological advancement of man have extremely affected biodiversity. Few would say that
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 nothing can be done to save the planet and its species, while others are optimistic to revamp the scenario.
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ew individuals, we are too late to take any actions to counter these situations, as global warming is looking like an imminent threat by human ventures.
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, deforestation plays a major role in increasing the temperature, due to which lakes are drying up and there are frequent bush fires in the forest. In both ways, plants and animals are facing difficulties even to survive. One more reason for the increase in heat is the carbon dioxide emitted from the heavy use of fossil fuels. Because of an increase in warmth, the ice from the north and south poles are melting rapidly and there is a shift in the climatic condition which is disturbing the fine balance of nature. While others believe that, measures can be taken to curb
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, planting trees and using clean energy is the best and immediate solution to temperature jump up. The other means we can tackle
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 appropriate actions, as much can be done to refine the circumstances, which will make
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