Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that overeating causes as many health problems as using cigarettes,

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advertisements should be forbidden like tobacco adverts. While I accept that

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idea may suit many people, I believe that the advertising of

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products should not be prohibited. On the one hand,

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commercials may bring about some certain

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problems.

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, the advertising of junk

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on broadcasting television is definitely harmful to many people, especially kids. If small children watch TV regularly and see the advertising of some fast-

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restaurants like KFC or McDonald, they will choose to eat

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instead

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of eating healthy ones like vegetables. In long term, children could be prone to obesity, which may cause some detrimental health problems

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as heart-related ailments.

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, some

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companies would like to invite some celebrities like pop stars and movie actors, who are known as trend-setters, to appear in their advertisements. By having the celebrities endorsement, many fans of those stars will buy the products like trend-chasers to support for what their idol advertise without knowing that the products are actually healthy or damaging.

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, despite the problems mentioned above, I disagree with the idea of banning

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advertisements. One reason is that not all

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advertisements are unfavourable. Some of them are healthy products and it will be unfair if these advertisements can not broadcast on television or social networking sites.

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, people who suffer from some health problems like eating disorders will find

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advertisement useful because it stimulates them to eat more and more. In conclusion, it is certainly true that the advertising of

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could lead to some problems but

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is by no means should the advertisements be forbidden.

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