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Shops should give preference to selling local foods rather than imported foods. Do you agree or disagree?

#shops #foods
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this
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 new era, so many big
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 markets opened by humans sp they can shop easily but they more preference to sell imported
food
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. If small shops sell local
food
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 its a good for so many other people who only prefer to eat their own cultural
food
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. I agree with
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 statement and elaborate
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 with, the shops are good and easy to find for those people who are disabled or cannot walk or talk properly because it is easy for them to find their local
food
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hort time period.
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, its help to make strong community power to sell their own
country
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 products.
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, imported
food
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 is always expensive because of their taxes and another duty
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, if any big market selling imported
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 like African black kidney beans or special rice and
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 government put heavy taxes on it so that makes difficult for normal people to buy those products.
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, selling
country
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food
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 product in shops or
super markets
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supermarkets
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 rather than imported
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, it will beneficial for
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 farmers because if pupil buys local
food
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then
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 local farmers cultivate more products own their
country
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 land and that makes good income source for them
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, the Canadian farmers mostly make money in
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ummertime rather than in winters because it is easier for them to cultivate different varieties of
food
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otherwise
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 they cannot produce anything in winters and they cannot make money too. So if shops or supermarkets sell local products
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 it easier for those people who only earn in-sessional time. In the nutshell, buying or selling different varieties of
food
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 help to big companies to produce a lot but if buy or sell not only imported but local
food
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 too
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 no doubt people will buy that product they
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ew generation to accept their
country
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food
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