In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and the society? Give reasons and make some suggestions.

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Recently, it has become a serious social concern that college graduates cannot find a job after they step into the real world.
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essay will discuss the consequences of
this
problem and offer suggestions. One of the main reasons for the above phenomenon partly lies in its own responsibility.
Firstly
, they might have not made sufficient preparation in terms of professional knowledge.
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raduates' request for work conditions might be unreasonable.
For example
,
although
on average an employee with three years' experience can earn a monthly salary of 300 pounds, it is not uncommon for numerous graduates to ask for a sum much higher than that. Of course, an employer would probably not be willing to give them the offer. There are
also
some social reasons to explain graduate unemployment.
First
, the worldwide economy has slumped, especially after the 2008 financial crisis, so the job market has greatly shrunk and not a sufficient number of jobs can be provided.
Second
, the improper design of curricula has
also
contributed to the problem of youth unemployment. To illustrate, the percentage of practical courses in my department is less than 20% , leading to
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shortage of working skills in my classmates. But actually
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a proportion of 50% might prove to be proper to train a graduate popular among potential employers.
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, some measures should be taken to solve
this
problem. To start with, students should work hard to prepare themselves well in their own field and should have a suitable expectation with regard to salaries.
Moreover
, the government should attempt to create job opportunities, e. g., in the area of alternative energy, while the education authorities should increase the proportion of practical courses in the curricula
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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