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Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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Happiness
 is the main goal for almost every human. It is considered by some to be related to money.
However
, most people believe that these two things are not the same. Philosophers for ages are trying to define what
happiness
 is. Many people are
also
 familiar with
this
 problematic question. The main reason why answering
this
 is so challenging is the subjectivity of
happiness
 itself.
In other words
, people have different expectations on what a happy life should look like.
For instance
, some of us, who grew up in an unhealthy environment, see
happiness
 in a simpler form than the others. Lack of financial problems is enough for one person
,
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 when another expects luxury,
such
 as a big mansion and an expensive car. Another problem is to fulfil our expectations. In my opinion, the best way to do
that is
 to start appreciating the life we already have. Not only should we stop finding downsides, but
also
 try to notice advantages. If we do that, our perception of what
happiness
 is can change and it will be easier for us to achieve it.
Moreover
, surrounding ourselves with positive supporting people can be another great step. It is known that our friends and family have a great impact on our lives and their attitude affects ours.
For example
, people, who are close
with
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 vain and selfish friends, tend to be more depressed
as a result
 of their friends’ lack of empathy.
Thus
, with above in mind, it can be said that
although
 the definition of
happiness
 is quite personal, the path of achieving it is similar for all of us. Our surroundings have an influence on our mental health,
therefore
 we should focus on keeping it reassuring.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • universally
  • cultural differences
  • psychological factors
  • satisfaction with life
  • emotional balance
  • personal achievements
  • social connections
  • fulfilling relationships
  • sense of belonging
  • sense of purpose
  • physical health
  • well-being
  • financial stability
  • mindfulness
  • gratitude
  • positive thinking
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