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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think it is more important to focus on the present and future rather than holding onto the past. I do not agree with
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 should not underestimate the influence history has to the present moment.
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's past.
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 of the reason is to avoid making the same mistake twice. It is crucial for a person to learn about the past.
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, if a country has offended another country and caused conflicts by speaking or acting in a certain way, it will happen again if no
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 learned from it.
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history from repeating itself. The other reason is that it makes us understand where we come from and how we have gotten toward where we are today. A person could gain a sense of self-identity and develop personal values from learning about the past.
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 is beneficial to
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's mental health as they will be less likely to feel lost when making difficult decisions in life.
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, I have learned from the past that freedom is a fundamental human right that someone else had already fought for us to have it today. It makes me value it a lot more and take it into consideration on every decision I make. To sum up, Even though focusing on the present is important, it is just as essential to learning about
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past. The past carries priceless lessons of other people's mistakes that we could learn from and by doing so we could make the right decision and not repeating the past mistake.
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