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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people hold the belief that there is no sense to learn about the past and there is a necessity to concentrate only on the resent. From my point of view, it is undoubtedly significant to evaluate past and underestimate the influence of history. In
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 of all, the most important reason is to avoid making the same mistake twice.
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, it is important to learn about the past.
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, if a country offended another country and caused conflicts by speaking or acting in a certain way, it would happen again if no one learned from it.
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,
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 may lead to war between two countries,
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 learning from the past mistakes can definitely prevent the repetition of history.
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, learning from the past will teach people about the origins of their nation and culture and a person will understand where he comes from and will value his roots.
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, each country has their own histories, and all of them proud of their histories. Through studying
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events from the past, we can see clearly what our ancestors did to build and protect our countries.
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, historical lessons give us pride
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 our countries, and they motivate us to contribute to the development of countries. In conclusion,
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 some people think that studying about the past has no value, I support the opinion that we should learn about the past because history makes us proud of our countries and teaches us to prevent mistakes.
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