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You have recently moved to a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Explain why you decided to move to a different city -Describe the new city and accommodation -Ask your friend to arrange a visit

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Dear Rashmi, I hope you
find
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 well. I really miss you as you moved to
Delhi
while
,
last
 year
due to
 your higher education. Here I would like to share with you some good news that you can never imagine but eventually happened. Owing to, my father's promotion me and my family shifted to
Delhi
last
 month.
Eventhough Iwant
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Even though I want
 to give you a surprise I cannot able to wait to see you.
However
, in
Delhi
 I am living so far away from you
hence
, I really wish to invite you to my new home.
Moreover
,
Delhi
 is
such
 an amazing city which offers incredible amenities
as well as
 great job opportunities. Apart from that here we have
brought
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bought
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 our new home which is
two-story
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a two-story
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 building as many rooms and facilities are available in my house,
such
 as
theatre
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a theatre
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, garden, and small swimming pool. So please come to my new home to spend a couple of days
thus
 we can spend quality time and we will enjoy a fun time together I am eagerly waiting to see you. lots of love from, Anjali
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Consider breaking your letter into clearer paragraphs with a single idea in each. This will help improve the readability.
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Pay attention to some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. Revisiting your letter and possibly using tools like Grammarly can improve this.
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Try to be more specific about some details, like giving examples for 'great job opportunities.'
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You have addressed all the points in the task prompt well.
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Your friendly and inviting tone is very appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately done and add a personal touch to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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