The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Although
the storage of personal
information
on large internet companies’ servers has become ubiquitous nowadays, some people believe that the full access to
this
information
can have veiled threat for people and lead to irrevocable damage. In my opinion, despite the fact that sharing personal
information
with internet companies allows people to gain accurate and actual
information
and make their
life
more convenient and comfortable, availability of personal data can bring about negative repercussions
such
as fraud and human rights restrictions. Admittedly, there are some benefits of
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istribution of key
information
to high tech companies.
Firstly
, by providing personal data, people might expect to obtain access to services that are able to suit their interests and needs.
In particular
, web sites are known to analyze the latest people’ requests and suggest more targeted advertisement.
Secondly
, having registered on different sites, not only can users find and communicate with other people,
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Facebook or Twitter, but
also
they can use different utilities that ease human
life
and allow handling with their different tasks. To illustrate, the usage of cloud technologies,
such
as Google disk, iCloud provides
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storage personal photos and video in one place, by contributing to cleaning the memory of their devices and gadgets.
Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe that sending personal
information
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etwork has probably serious drawbacks. One obvious issue is that
this
information
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an inappropriate way by hackers. Rarely do people realize about
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afety of their data, located on different servers that can be stolen in the long run. Criminals can get access to
this
information
and use for fraud,
for instance
, make transactions with credit cards or distribute users’ photos and video. Another potentially dangerous problem is the possibility of tracking users, by depriving them their private
life
.
This
is due to the fact that special institutions are likely to control human
life
and follow their location and movements and in case of any
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impose fines and punishment.
For example
, the spy programs like TikTok developed in China, accumulate whole
information
about its users that can be used for variety
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selfish aims. In conclusion, I am convinced that some advantages of the storage of personal
information
in internet companies,
such
as interest tailored services and convenient time-saved features can not outweigh its obvious disadvantages.
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