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It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

In the past two decades, there have been endless debates on e-
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 and their benefits. Some believe that the advanced technology will substitute paper
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 in no time
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, others disagree and still prefer the classic old touch. In
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 will soon be replaced by digital ones. For those who like to read, the first obvious reason that they prefer electronic devices is accessibility. As content can easily be accessed with just a touch, they can start reading within minutes. Readers nowadays can either read daily news online or catch up on their favourite
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 on their Kindle
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.
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 would not have been possible if it were twenty years ago because they would have had to go and buy newspapers at the news agency. Another benefit of choosing digital devices over printed
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 is the luxury of having many
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 on one device.
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 is simply because users can store them in the reader’s online personal account
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, they can own as many
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 as they want constantly. Some even have their own online library,
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, where they have collected all the
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 that they have read on their private Google Drive. By just turning on their laptop or smartphone, their mini e-library will be accessible anytime and anywhere. In conclusion, printed
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 , which are on the shelves, will be replaced by digital ones in the future, though others disagree. In my view, I concur with
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 statement and that not only are e-
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 accessible but
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 convenient for readers to collect
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 just one device.

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Make sure your main points are well supported with clear examples and details.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to improve flow between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Try to expand your introduction and conclusion for a stronger start and finish.
task achievement
Your points about accessibility and convenience are clear and relevant.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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