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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Almost every day of the week, you can read stories about convincing children to get indulged in trying hard, in respect of glorious achievements in newspapers. In fact, some societies have promoted the idea, if juveniles stuck into the maelstrom of studying, they ensure their futures eventually.
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, others believe it leads to hazardous detrimental effects. I personally opine children will be able to pursue their dreams by working hard;
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 not to be overlooked.
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, triggering juveniles to hard-working has both advantages and disadvantages which are going to be discussed in the following
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 with their
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 and setting their minds to studying hard, they actually guarantee their
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For instance
, Steve Johnson had been studying hard,
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 in the
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 schools all around the world, respectively he has established the biggest and most lucrative company which offers financial service.
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, parents have to consider, there are an enormous amount of dreams which are
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, if children do not reach an out-of-reach achievement which their parents expect, they are prone to a vast majority of mental
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 issues
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 as depression, anxiety and isolation. According to recent research conducted by the Shahid Beheshti University, considerable numbers of
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eenager studying in NODET schools are suffering from depression,
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 leads them thinking about suicide.
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they have
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 30 percents of them killed themselves in the past two decades. In
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, it seems children may have a bright future and attain anything they want, yet it is apparent that in some cases it causes
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a various number of mental disease.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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