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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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In
this
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 era, people have started comparing their
life
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 with the
money
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, where they think that, to be happy the main path to follow should be to have plenty of
money
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.
This
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 essay will discuss what are the positive aspects of having a lot of
money
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 and other ways that can bring happiness to
life
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. To commence with, wealth helps to buy every luxury of
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.
One
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 can buy luxurious cars, clothes, accessories and other costly products without thinking, which a person with less
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 can never afford.
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 will
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 help a rich individual to live a royal
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 where he will have all the controls and comforts of
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.
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, having a lot of wealth will help to study anywhere around the world where fees do not matter at all.
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, celebrities send their children to the world’s top universities because they can easily manage the expenses, no matter how intelligent their children are. Other than
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, there are few important things as well that can bring happiness to
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 another
life
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. The main aspect is family and friends. A person who has enough
money
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, sometimes have no
one
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 to share with or have no
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 to spend with their loved
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,
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 individual, in general, will
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 consider as a poor person with no happiness in
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. They should take out some spare
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 for friends and family to stay joyful.
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, the peacefulness of mind is another factor that should
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 be considered for a happy
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, highly educated and rich people who stay busy in a plethora of events like meetings, calls and conferences will never have
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 for themselves.
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, they mostly struggle with the stress in mind to earn more and more
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 that can lead to depression. So they should spend some idle
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 doing meditation to be away from the stressful
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. To conclude, though with
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 every costly product can be purchased to be happy,
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 many factors like spending
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 with loved
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 and themselves are
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 considered as the positive aspects of a happy
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.
One
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 should think about all the different options wisely and live in the cheerful surrounding.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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