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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is often perceived by many that the loss of specific flora and fauna is the primary menace the world is facing today. I am in support of those who believe that there are other prominent issues including pollution and deforestation which need to be addressed on a priority basis. On the one hand, there are innumerable reasons why masses argue that the issue for preserving wildlife which is on the verge of extinction is more serious.
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 is because the survival of all the living beings on the Earth is inextricably connected so they have a pivotal role in maintaining the balance of
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cosystem. Frogs in
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ood chain,
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, feed on insects, so the absence of frog would result in disturbing the cycle.
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, they accord that all the fellow creatures are significant for the planet Earth.
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, the proponents of the other aspect whom I support confer that other
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 issues are imminent threats and need to be prioritized. To be more precise,
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roblem of pollution being an alarming situation should be resolved urgently as it affects
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mankind by reducing the air quality index.
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deforestation
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 land, the forest area is being cleared to
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 the requirement, leading to lesser absorption of carbon gases which result in warming of the air.
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survival even more difficult.
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, protecting the lush greens and keeping a check on pollution levels are absolute need of an hour. In
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, protecting the wildlife is surely a matter to be looked into but in my view
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if the life of human beings is in threat, there is no
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 that saving them would be a mindful step.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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