Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

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As we all know that wage is playing an important role in our life. Without which we cannot fulfil our basic requirements like food, clothing and shelter. We should understand the profit of income and impart the same to our children. Some say that few children already know the value of it and ways to handle cash. Other groups of people say that earnings management skill should be added as part of
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, institute going children do not require wealth and find relevant about bill management in the subject. All their necessities and things are taken care of by their parents including pickup and drop from the institute. These children are very young and it's hard to explain the importance and benefits of stipend.
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, my cousin, who is eleven years old says that he does not require any salary and want to know the value of the property. Because his requirements are fulfilled by his father and mother. All
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, we see some parents work on a day to day wages and earn very poor wages which can only satisfy their daily living. Even though they struggle, they want their children to study well and
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children do not consider their parent's hard work and demand property for buying chocolates and clothes.Here comes the need to understand the value of capital and tactics to take care of it. To sum up, even though the money is not important to school children. some basic knowledge of property, its use and ways to manage should be included in school subjects.
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, they are aware of what to do and what not to do with the fee they have.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial literacy
  • curriculum
  • fiscal responsibility
  • money management
  • budgeting
  • saving
  • investing
  • adult population
  • financial decisions
  • educational systems
  • theoretical curriculum
  • practical life skills
  • real-life experience
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