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There are many towns and cities designed and constructed in previous centuries, and they are suitable for those times What problem is caused by this today? How to solve this problem?

Old towns and cities built hundreds of years ago are still a feature of numerous countries
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 they can prove awkward for city planners.
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, there are some measures that can
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could
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be taken to improve
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 situation. A major problem related to
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 situation is that the development of old cities to suit modern needs is hampered to a large extent in two major ways
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, they were designed for a smaller local population with very narrow roads and tightly compact
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hampering
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 mobility for the modern-day residents.
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 results in failing to provide people living there with more amenities
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 their modern counterparts do.
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, it is difficult to construct some
buildings
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 like shopping malls, underground parking lots, office
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 and sports facilities, which are all an integral part of people's lives today.  
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, there is
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 need for more housing as the population in these places increases. Since the problem has no single solution, it must be fought on many fronts.
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 with, some
buildings
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 can be demolished so as to construct new
buildings
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 to make the most of the limited space. More high-rise apartment
buildings
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,
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, can be built to satisfy the needs for housing and improve the poor housing
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 at the same time.
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, historic
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 can be restored on account of their commercial and cultural value.
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, the government can use
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 to facilitate economic growth through tourism, thereby providing more income for urban development and urban planning. In conclusion, more time and energy should be invested in working out the solution by using a variety of approaches in order to make both residents and local governments benefit from
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 situation.

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Make a clear view in your intro and end with a line that shows your idea matches the task.
development
Give more solid and real examples to back each point.
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Use linking words to show cause, result, and contrast in a simple way.
language
Check word choice and keep sentences simple and short so many readers can get the meaning.
content
The essay shows a good fit to the task with problem and fix.
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There are clear blocks of idea with a start and end in the essay.
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Some good examples are used to show ideas.
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