Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it is being argued about filtering the information of descriptive crime scenes from
TV
, newspapers and other media because it might impact negatively society. I strongly agree with the statement that the crime description has not to be detailed at all, but the community
might be informed about what is happening. This
essay will describe more in detail with examples.
To go into further
detail, crimes should be a matter to be informed about and discussed in Newspapers, TV
and other media. The main reason for this
is the importance that relevant facts keep the community
informed of what exactly is occurring in their neighbourhood, state, country or even worldly. This
is a positive fact that allows people to be aware if they are involved in a situation where that could be considered a red flag. A good example of this
happened last
week, when the news on TV
advised about men
, with his physical description, who was around the main train station in my neighbourhood for several evenings assaulting the users. Fix the agreement mistake
a man
This
fact was affecting in a positive way to people who heard about that to avoid the place during that time if the place was not too crowded and not becoming a part of the statistics.
On the other hand
, it is important to keep in mind that providing extra information that describes crime scenes could result in a negative impact on society. Following the previous example, in the case that the scene was described in detail, it will be such
as a teaching or a brainstorming for those who are just trying to find a way to assault people easily. However
, the community
in general will have a higher sense of awareness but it does not mean that remains safe. For that reason, it is important to filter some of the details that do not input positive content.
In conclusion, extra information about crimes could be turned into bad consequences so it is important to restrict it just to what is necessary for the community
. I would recommend to those who are responsible for approving TV
, Newspapers and media content to create a sense of responsibility with their collaborators at the moment of creating the news.Submitted by mantonieta.albarracin on
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grammar
Try to avoid minor grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'has not to be detailed' which should be 'should not be detailed'.
relevance
Ensure every paragraph clearly supports the thesis statement. Some parts seem slightly off-topic or less directly connected to the main point.
vocabulary
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance readability and demonstrate linguistic proficiency.
introduction
The introduction clearly states your position and sets the tone for the essay.
examples
You provided relevant examples, such as the situation around the main train station, which strengthen your argument.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reiterates your stance.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite