Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a belief that it is necessary for a

person

to be lucky to reach all the goals in life.

However

, I am strongly convinced that

luck

is not the thing which a human should rely on. Little do people realize how important it is to make efforts if they want to achieve superior aims in their life. If people did not work hard trying to discover the ways of making their lives better, they would not be able to become successful ones.

For example

, Henry Ford had been trying to invent the car when nobody, except his wife, did

not

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believe in him.

However

, he had been struggling with himself trying to make everything better so at

last

he succeeded became one of the most well-known and rich people in the world.

Furthermore

, when an adult has been waiting for

luck

for a long time he loses all the opportunities which are discovered in front of him. By doing his work in a proper way and developing himself, a

person

easily

gain

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the aims and often thinks that it is

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luck

a bit of luck

a stroke of luck

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luck

unnoticing his own hard work.

However

, it is claimed that only

luck

helps people to achieve their goals. It is said that nothing is depended on the

person

and being lucky is a quality which a human can have or not.

For example

, some people tell about Bill Gates who is a quite intelligent man.

However

, it is said that he could not achieve anything without a lucky chance which was given to him by his mother`s friend who helped Bill and promoted him in the

IT sphere

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. In conclusion, I would like to claim that it is unlikely possible to rely on

luck

when everything in

this

world is dependent on a

person

who develops his own life by himself.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

305 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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determination
hard work
perseverance
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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Fewer and fewer people today right by hand using a pen pencil or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Self- practice 27/11 : Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive development or negative development?