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Nowadays many business meetings and training are happening online and not in real offices. Do you think the advantages of this approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the advancement of the Internet, communication can be effortlessly done over the globe. In the corporate world, more and more companies are conducting conference meetings and official
trainings
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 online.
This
 trend has its own pros and cons and in
this
 essay, I shall prove how the merits outweigh the demerits.
First
 and foremost, business calls are accessible from the computer provides the opportunity to attend it from home or anywhere else saving a lot of travel time.
Moreover
, reduction in travel is surely lucrative to curtail the problems of traffic congestion, air pollution, and crowd, especially in metro cities.
Likewise
, it is
also
 beneficial to the organizations, where they do not require a lot of effort and hefty amount with reference to rents, electricity bills, and technical equipment to gather all employees from different locations for professional talks. Online
trainings
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also
 provide comfort and luxury for the employees to attend the recorded sessions as per their convenience.
On the contrary
, some workers may face difficulties
such
 as network issues while attending calls or training from home. The house lacks professional background which may cause hindrance during client calls and may impact the performance at the end.
For instance
, kitchen noise or kids or other family members babbling may sometimes cause significant disturbance during corporate sessions. To recapitulate, it is irrefutable that web connectivity in terms of video conferencing and training session has revolutionized business communication.
Although
, at some times internet connectivity can impact the cyber connection impacting organizational meetings.
However
, cyberspace
provide
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 numerous benefits which prove to be weightier than its negative outcomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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