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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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ngoing debate about a gap between the rich and the poor and how to end it. Some argue that earning a lot of money by a few people is beneficial for the country, whereas others disagree and think that there should be a limit on how high salary can be. Even though both sides have convincing arguments, I believe that there are better solutions to decrease the aforementioned gap.
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control over workers’ salaries, believe that limiting the possible income would bring more equality in
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it would prevent the rich from gaining unfair ascendancy over certain aspects of
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, capping high salaries will increase the amount of funding for public services which will benefit all people in
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 salary is a way to entice people to do them.
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 salaries, people would simply leave a country to seek work somewhere else.
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, a country would lack specialists in many fields. In conclusion, the government should certainly do something to lessen the disparity.
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, I have no doubt that putting the limit of the amount of money people can earn is not the best way to do that.
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, the government should empower the poor people and help them earn a good salary by offering them free education and training.
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  • consumer spending
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