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Smart devices have put all of the world’s information at our fingertips. The benefits of this development are obvious, but what are the drawbacks?

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Internet surfing has been made readily available through apply gadgets, as we can see in our daily living. These gadgets have obviously made data available and our lives easier. Despite that, there are
also
 drawbacks to
this
 technological advancement.
This
 essay aims to enumerate the drawbacks as presented in our society.
Firstly
, Smart device has made emails delivering better but
this
 doesn’t justify putting emails delivering men from their work so making human-less redundant. In the past decade, 50% of America express workers were made redundant due to the advancement of the Internet. As revealed by Daily Mail, in 2019, 60% of average Americans are interested in reading daily news from his smart gadget sitting on the couch than reading from a Newspaper in the subway going to work, the smart device as made life easier yes, but has made us as humans lazy and been too comfortable.
Secondly
, The use of Library is becoming obsolete due to the information readily available on the Internet;
this
 makes students less reliance on textbooks and classroom activities. The Library works
such
 as Group studies and Group assignments were the primary developments of individual who find it difficult to study alone so, reliance on in smartphones information will reduce the use of
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ibrary and other development of our lives. Picking up a book in the Library to read during the weekend has been cut short due to the Internet; Personal relationship like getting a reading partner has gone over the flame. Smartphones and other devices have played a vital role in apply society but have
also
 made human interaction less appealing. In summary, solely dependent on Internet information will make apply life redundant and hinders the development of classroom activities. As
this
 essay as shown, Personal relationship is gradually overtaking on the Internet.
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