You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: · tell him/her which team won · describe the weather conditions that day · say how you felt about the match
Dear Bob,
I'm writing to inform you about our football match
last
week.
Our match against Southall's senior soccer team ended in our favour, with us winning by a 2-goal margin. We also
conceded 2 goals in the second half, so the final result was 4-2.
It was a tough day for both teams as the rain poured heavily on us, especially in the first half. There was almost no visibility, and one side of the pitch was partially flooded. However
, in the last
10 minutes of the game, there was no rainfall but because of the water, it was difficult to keep our footing.
Even though we came out victorious, your command in the midfield was missed. The coordination you have with me and the other forwards was a miss. It was a tough battle in the midfield, the supply of the ball in the final third was off. After conceding 2 goals in the second half, we were under pressure and, as a result
, made a couple of mistakes. However
, we controlled our nerves and managed to score 2 more goals before the final whistle.
Wish you a speedy recovery. Looking forward to hearing back from you.
Best wishes,
NileshSubmitted by majumdarnilesh21 on
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coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized and covers all points specified in the task. However, you could slightly improve the coherence by adding clearer transitions between some paragraphs.
task achievement
Consider mentioning the specific feelings experienced during the match to add more depth to the task achievement.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is very friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, making it suitable for the task.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter, including the opening and closing, is clear and effective.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite