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Band 8

An historic building in your city is in bad condition. Write to the local government. Include in your letter: Why the building is important Its present condition What action must be taken

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to draw your attention to the condition of St. Maria’s Cathedral on Main Street. The matter of fact is that the
church
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 is a historical building, which has remained among the few as a heritage from the medieval era in our city.
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, it is a fabulous example of Gothic architecture with a striking feature of the
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 steeple. Unfortunately, today the Cathedral falls into decay and demands an urgent renovation. The main important issue of it is that the roof has holes and during the rain, the inner part of the
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 becomes flooded.
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 why the walls in some parts of it are mouldy and wet.
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, I would like to recommend adding the
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 to the list of required funding buildings in our city for the
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 financial year. It
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 would be great if the city council organized a fundraising event in the favor of the
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.
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, the volunteers would be able to start the renovation of the roof as soon as possible. I appreciate your attention to
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 matter. Sincerely yours, Marie Cherry
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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