Many people believe that eighteen years old is the appropriate age to finish school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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People hold different views about whether eighteen years old is the proper time to finish
school
or not. Personally, I agree strongly that
this
opinion is true from different perspectives.
This
essay presents
firstly
why lower
age
is not proper for finishing base education followed by the reasons that higher
age
is not appropriate as well.
To begin
with, to be younger than 18
age
is not quite senior for finishing
school
and decision
for
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the right job or
further
education.
In other words
, it is the time for preparation for the university exam
This
stage is vital and stressful to gain future success in own career .
For example
, in Azerbaijan young should choose their professional path immediately after
ending
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finishing
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school
through
this
exam. Youngsters usually feel under pressure and think that
this
exam
difinate
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determines
their happiness in
private
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their private
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life
. In children of lower than 18
this
period can damage
psychologically
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them psychologically
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and physically,
as well as
, after
school
life
begins
life
period requires more responsibility and
this
situation burdens
young
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the young
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.
On the other hand
, if
this
age
is climbed more
then
individuals can not begin their job.
That is
to say, they are not enable to earn their own money and still are dependent on their families.
This
situation creates much trouble from
family's
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the family's
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perspective because ending
school
later means children need care for
longer
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time.
In addition
, there are
such
families as parents are older and they can not work more
due to
their ages or illnesses.
Consequently
, if the
age
of ending
school
is increased when
evaluate
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economic issues. In conclusion, I agree that
this
is the most sufficient
age
to finish
school
and in future
life
, both receive responsibilities and make choices independently.
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