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Some parents especially mothers stay at home instead of working .some people think that they should be given monetary compensation from the government. Do you agree or disagree

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in thinking of mothers should stay
home
instead
 of working with government subsidy. There is a widespread worry that it will lead to
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eluge of problems.
However
, I do not entirely agree with the statement, and I will explain the reasons in the coming paragraphs. There are many arguments in favour of my stance. The
first
 dominant point is that the Mothers plays
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rucial role in
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amily.
Moreover
,
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nly monther can do
home
 chores,
for example
, cooking, cleaning, laundry and so on. Thanks to the wide range of advantages of
mother
 offer, not only one can get benefit more when it comes to being useful, but they can
also
 enhance the productivity and quality of family life with much ease, efficacy, and convenience.
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,
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other has lots of responsibility for
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amily which helps the Family to grow with quality and family values. Apart from
this
, the Government has
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ower to make mothers life better. There are so many ways,
First
 and foremost is
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ubsidy.
Although
 money helps the
mother
 to buy some food for cooking or buy
home
 cleaning products, it
also
 helps to do shopping with their own concerns.
Secondly
, Government pension makes mothers life in better quality.
For instance
,
mother
 lifestyle is all under children and husband, with the pension
mother
 helps their family to fulfil their daily needs
instead
 of bargaining with his husband In conclusion, after pondering over plenty of thoughts and deliberations, it is clear that the benefits of the
mother
 staying at
home
 with government pension are indeed too great to ignore.
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