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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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In the present time, the trend of consuming cuisine is rising,
as a result
, people like to consume foodstuff rather than
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onventional meal.
This
 trend causes an adverse effect on families, individuals and community. I acknowledge the fact that it has many grave consequences on human society and their family bonding. To embark upon, home-cooked foods have manifold advantages. It has all necessary nutritions, vitamins and minerals.
However
, individuals more gravitate to international foods. It has an adverse impact on individuals as foods contain calory , sugar, preservatives which are unhealthy for us. That being reason, thousands of people have become prey of diseases
such
 as obesity, heart problems, so on.
Consequently
, it reduces their productivity. Unhealthy people are not useful for society. Government has to spend thousands of dollars for their medical treatments. Apart from
this
, nowadays, more often than not youth like to go to restaurants or international food stalls like KFC, Dominoes, Mcdonald, to name but a few. These junk foods are pocket friendly and everyone likes their taste.
Instead
 of spending time with their family members, youth prefer to go to restaurants and enjoy their day. In a bygone era, people used to share their ideas on the dining table while having their meal, in
such
 ways, they made their bond much stronger. Nowadays, they usually go to restaurants and do not spend time with their family members.
As a result
, they feel more isolated. It is evident that owing to
this
 phenomenon, an increasing number of people face depression problems and lose their bond with family.
Hence
, to conclude,I opine that
although
 people like to eat more international foods, they should know its repercussions and should not consume excessively.
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