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Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #development #poverty #world #growth #environment
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In
this
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 contemporary era, the world is changing rapidly and dramatically. Economic development is an important thing to counter some gigantic problems like poverty and unemployment in each and every nation.
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, some obedient citizens believe that it harms the
environment
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 in that way, which will not be irreversible, so it should be halted immediately. I cent per cent agree with the latter view.
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 and foremost, economic growth is the backbone of any nation. It definitely helps them to overcome poverty and unemployment, because it offers a huge amount of job opportunities. Due to it, if people have jobs,
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 they will able to buy basic amenities, because of
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 they would have chances to improve their lifestyles.
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,
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 development creates more harm to the
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, owing to achieve it, industries and companies, not only have to generate
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 but
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 manufacture products and in
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 process, lots of fuel is used, which creates pollution by emitting reek and particles into the atmosphere.
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 eventually damages the
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. In my opinion, to halt economic growth is not the best option. Nations must find another way to stop polluting the
environment
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.
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, nowadays, everybody knows that renewable
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 sources are the cleanest
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 resources because they harness their
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 through the natural sources
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 as sun, wind and water, they do not emit poisonous gases into the atmosphere. To conclude, the government should enact stricter laws for damaging environments, so it can be reduced greatly.
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, think about alternative
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 sources, which generate
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 without polluting the
environment
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.
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